This week’s poetry challenge is to write a senryū as per Colleen Chesebro’s commentary below:
Senryū is a Japanese form similar to haiku: three lines with a s-l-s syllable count up to 17 syllables.
Senryū are written about human foibles, while haiku are more nature related. Senryū can be cynical or humorous. This poem makes the human, not the world around them, the subject of the poem.
Senryū are easier to write than haiku. Think about the human condition: sex, family relations, love, religion, politics, and any emotions that touch on the pain we experience through sorrow, prejudice, oppression, anger, and frustration
Colleen Chesebro of Word Craft Poetry blog
You can join in the challenge here: https://wordcraftpoetry.com/2023/01/17/tankatuesday-weekly-poetry-challenge-no-303-1-17-23/
Here is my attempt:

Clandestine hands move
Silent serial killer
Everyone’s clock strikes
By Robbie Cheadle
Dark, but well done. Nice play on “hands”.
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Thank you, Ms D. I am in a dark poetry phase currently while I exorcise my mental devils.
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Write on through, Robbie. ❤️
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Oh! Robbie I like this so dark so deep excellent 💜
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Thank you, Willow. I am glad you like it as you are so good at dark poetry.
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I love dark poetry and yours is very good 💜
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That one really makes you pause and think, Robbie. A darker piece, but so well done!
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Hi Mae, I’m still using dark poetry to deal with my anxiety. I’m glad this poem made you think.
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Robbie, this is great. I loved the “silent serial killer”!
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HI Linda, thank you. I appreciate your comment.
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excellent Robbie!
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HI Wayne, thank you for your lovely comment. Hugs.
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I surely couldn’t have done better, Robbie!
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Thank you, Jacqui, I’m glad you like this.
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Brilliant Robbie! The line about the clandestine hands is amazing and a little scary. Did you choose the clock image also?
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Thank you, Kay, I am pleased you like that line. I did chose the image from the free photographs on Unsplashed.
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Wow, well done, Robbie. Your poem is both mysterious and frightening. That’s hard to do in three lines of haiku!
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Hi Gwen, thank you, I appreciate your comment very much.
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Outstanding, Robbie! You drew such an evocative picture and created such a dark mood in just three lines.
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HI Dave, thank you, I really appreciate your comment.
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This poem sent a chill down my spine . . .
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HI Liz, I think that is a compliment. Thank you. I am still vanquishing my mental devils – smile!
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Yes, it’s a compliment!
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Ah, age. Tick, tock.
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Indeed, we can’t escape aging and eventual death.
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This is soooo good! You did an excellent job! 🤍
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Thank you, Kymber
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Brief and effective, Robbie!
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Thank you, Audrey. I rather liked this, even though it is very dark.
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Excellent, Roberta. I thought you might like this. My wife is taking a African Literature course as part of her PhD studies. She learned the class came about after a student wanted to work on a master’s degree at St. Johns Collage up in Santa Fe, NM. St. Johns is a small elitist liberal arts college. When the woman asked about doing a master’s in African Literature, one of the professors in his snotty British accent told her there was no African literature. So the professor who is teaching the class my wife is in created a class in African Literature at UNM. Laurie has started with a 1931 English translation of “Chaka” by Thomas Mofolo. Are you familiar with it?
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HI Timothy, of course there is African literature and I am delighted to know your wife is studying it. I do now Thomas Mofolo and his book Chaka. I am very interested in Zulu history and know a lot about Shaka Zulu and the history of the Zulu Kingdom after his murder. I am writing a collection of short stories which focuses on various African battles and pieces of fascinating African history. I have two stories about the Battle of Isandlwana and I have visited all the relevant sites in KwaZulu Natal in South Africa. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Battle_of_Isandlwana Isandlwana is a fascinating battle to read about as the Zulu warriors thrashed the British. It was a most humiliating defeat for the British Empire.
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PS there is also some lovely poetry by African poets. I shared some on my blog last year this time.
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Fantastic, Robbie! Love it 💕🙂
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Hi Harmony, it’s lovely to see you. I’m glad you liked this poem.
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Ominous! I like how you make each word count. (K)
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Thank you, Kerfe. Yes, it is ominous. Time does steal our lives from us, second by second.
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Chilling and excellent all in one poem, Robbie! xo
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Thank you, Lauren. It is true though, isn’t it?
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This senryū is BRILLIANT! I actually laughed, uneasily, at the end. So much said in three lines. Tick Tock!!!!
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HI Pam, I am glad you appreciated this poem. Thank you.
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Time is the root of all evil, lol. Love this, Robbie.
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Thank you, Jacquie. I think it really is. No one wins the battle against time.
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Love the imagery with this 🙂
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Thank you.
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You got an “Ooh!” out of me, Robbie. My husband looked over, and I had to read it to him. That was fabulous! Wowza.
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Thank you, Diana. I really appreciate that reaction from as talented a poet as you.
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That was fantastic, Robbie! I loved it!
Yvette M Calleiro 🙂
http://yvettemcalleiro.blogspot.com
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HI Yvette, thank you, I’m glad you enjoyed.
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My hand went to my neck with this one. Powerful!!!
Pat
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Thank you, Pat.
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The hands of time move us ever closer towards our ultimate death… WOW, Robbie. This was a good capture of those emotions. 💛
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Thank you, Colleen. I’ve been releasing my anxiety through poetry recently. It really helps ease my mind and soul.
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I do much the same thing, Robbie. Writing poetry is a great stress releasor. It takes our mind away from our worries.
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Nicely done, Robbie.
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Thank you, Dan. I like this poem, even though its dark.
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I was having a conversation with my healthy 87-year-old friend today. She said she’s just starting to feel her age and realizing that her time is limited. So this poem is timely for me. I thought time would slow down when I retired, but it just keeps zooming along without us hardly being aware of it. Thanks for the awareness.
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Hi JoAnna, my time seems to disappear horribly fast too. Thanks for adding to this conversation.
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Eerily and full of truth, Robbie!
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Thank you, Denise
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Wow, this is so good, Roberta – I love the imagery you used to convey the meaning. ❤
~David
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Hi Ben, thank you. Poetry comes in waves for me and I’ve had a bit of a roll lately.
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Just ‘David’ will do, Roberta 🤗
The word ‘ben’ simply means ‘son of’ in Hebrew.
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David
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Hi David, sorry, that was a brain wobble.
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hahaha! You’re speaking my language, Roberta ❤
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Wow. Time stands still for no one. We just saw a magic show (TV) where the act tried to get folks to believe they had traveled back in time… but he had actually advanced only his own cell phone, so when everyone else had watched his phone tick back in time (not sure how he did that…) all the clocks of the hostess and hosts held the same time. 🙂 Hubby figured out the trick before the hosts did!
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That sounds like a good trick. Clever hubby!
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Some magic tricks are really just mathimatical sequences. 😀
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