Roberta Writes – W3 poetry challenge #poetry

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I am a little late for this challenge even though I had my poem written on Saturday. Thank you to David from Skeptics Kaddish for this great prompt. You can see what other poets have written here: https://skepticskaddish.com/2025/02/05/w3-prompt-145-weave-written-weekly/

Expectation Gap

People frequently let me down in life

Strife

becoming the name of the game

Blame

heaped like coals on my head

Dread

filling my heart and soul like lead

Bread

cannot always be broken to mend

Friend –

ships that dissolve into disillustionment

Disappointment

has occurred in every corner of my world

Curled

into tight bands around my heart

Darts

of anguish at kindness thrown back in my face

Grace

and courage no longer general life skills

On a happier note that this poem, I found this interesting flower in my cactus garden:

Picture caption: I thought the purple and yellow blossom was most unusual
Picture caption: the flower is really tall
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  8. Robbie, this poem powerfully conveys the weight of disappointment. The rhyme and theme really amplify the emotional impact of each struggle.

    Just a small note: echo verse typically involves repeating the final syllable or sound of each line, but your approach with rhyming the last two words creates a unique effect that’s still captivating. It’s such a great twist on the form!

    Much love,
    David

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    1. Hi David, ah, yes, you are right. I didn’t ‘listen’ properly and made up my own version. My brain does that sometimes and I am quite convinced what I’ve done is completely correct. I liked how it turned out anyway. I’m glad you enjoyed the poem.

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      1. there were a LOT of other W3 participants who did the same exact thing that you did – the concept of an ‘echo’ isn’t intuitive to a lot of people because it’s not a common concept in most poetic forms.

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    1. Yes, it does seem that all families have their ‘Old Man of the Sea’. [Sinbad the Sailor encountered the monstrous Old Man of the Sea (Arabic: شَيْخ الْبَحْر⁩, romanized: Šayḵ al-Baḥr) on his fifth voyage. The Old Man of the Sea in the Sinbad tales was said to trick a traveller into letting him ride on his shoulders while the traveller transported him across a stream. However, the Old Man would then not release his grip, forcing his victim to transport him wherever he pleased and allowing his victim little rest. The Old Man’s victims all eventually died of this miserable treatment, with the Old Man either eating them or else robbing them. Sinbad, however, after getting the Old Man drunk with wine, was able to shake him off and kill him.[2]]

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  13. I ran to the comments first to see if David said you did this one right, because I am at a loss as to what all of us got wrong about it! But anyways, I thought you did an amazing job. Cohesive, tells the story, rhymes all look like they are in the right place to me. I posted mine today too, too late for the party, but I struggled with that thing tooth and nail to fit the form as I read and continue to read the instructions. I gotta be happy with what came of all of those efforts. By the way, nice to meet you

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    1. Thank you, Merril. I have come to the conclusion that people are just spoiled and it is easier to make someone else take responsibility than step up yourself. Anyhow, I am okay about it now that I wrote this poem. I almost felt the irritation ebbing as the words flowed.

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  25. Very cool flower and your poem speaks to all of us, in one way or another. Just stopped talking to a friend I’ve had most of my adult life. When it’s over, it’s over. I can no longer trust her. I guess I never could.

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  29. Hi, Robbie – Your poem perfectly captures the weight of disappointment and the raw emotions that come with it. That flower in your cactus garden is a lovely contrast—nature’s little reminder that beauty can still surprise us.

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  32. Your poem is terrific, Robbie. It would make a cool Rap song. It reads like one.

    That plant is fabulous! It looks like a flower rocket. It just came out of nowhere? How cool.

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