Roberta Writes – d’Verse MTB: Boxing Clever to The Bop #poetry

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For today’s MTB poetry prompt we are writing Bop Poetry created by Aafa Michael Weaver.

Poetry Style: a 23 line poem which has 3 stanzas ordered thus, with a same one line refrain after each:-

  • a six-line stanza – that poses a problem
  • an eight-line stanza – that expands upon that problem
  • a six-line stanza – that solves, or fails to solve, the problem

Include this same 1 line repeat after each stanza:
‘I found a box and put a room inside’
OR ‘I found a box…[add your own words to complete the line]

You can join in here: https://dversepoets.com/2024/05/02/mtb-boxing-clever-to-the-bop/

Well, I wrote a Bop poem, but I changed the repeated line a bit from the prompt.

Opening Pandora’s Box

This poem is another of my chaos nature poems that depict creatures in an unnatural nature setting. For this poem, I imagined a glass aquarium containing tiny tropical fish. The setting is a desert as what is more unnatural than ocean creatures in a man-made desert. Water is a very scarce resource.

A box overflowing with water

Clear and inviting – consumable

A mirage in this barren wasteland

An illusion – a refraction of light

from the sky, by heated air

Wicked distortion of reality

Pandora’s box once opened, cannot be closed

Temperatures soar, the box sweats

Its glass walls glisten with moisture

Flashes of bright colour disturb its clarity

Translating into thrashing tails, frantic fins

Tiny bubbles rise, pockmarking the surface

Heat saturated liquid starts to boil

Desperation leads to innovation – swarming

Colourful darts combine to thwack one side

Pandora’s box once opened, cannot be closed

Under onslaught, the box lurches

Precious fluid cascading over edges

River of water turns to a river of blood

Box tips! Creatures slither out

onto hot sand; they frizzle and fry

While vital liquid slowly drains into dead sand

Pandora’s box once opened, cannot be closed

Picture caption: brightly coloured fish. Picture from Unsplash.
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  9. One should never open Pandora’s box, but it seems to happen all too often. Love the poem, Roberta.

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  11. Your Bop, Opening Pandora’s Box, is a terrifying warning, Robbie, and a very effective chaos nature poem. You evoked the heat of the barren wasteland in the ‘wicked distortion of reality’ and the sweating box, and I felt so sorry for the fish with their ‘thrashing tails’ and ‘frantic fins’ in the boiling water. These lines are particularly shocking:

    ‘Box tips! Creatures slither out
    onto hot sand; they frizzle and fry
    While vital liquid slowly drains into dead sand’.

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  14. Roberta, this is ‘out of the world’, so good. I like your theme line, “Pandora’s box once opened, cannot be closed,” it reminds me of California Hotel’s inverse, “You can check out but you can’t leave.” 

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  16. Hello Robbie,

    I don’t know about these poetry rules, but I did read the ones here.

    I love that you “changed” the repeat! I adore the rebel in you.

    Of course it was also needed to say what you said.

    Your poem is terrific. The truth hurts.

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    1. HI Resa, I am innocent of rebellion. It is my nature chaos muse who is to blame. Smile! I really enjoyed this form and it fitted right in with my latest thought processes. I’m glad you appreciated this poem. I fear for our animals with the impact of global warming and climate change starting to increase.

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